What Went Well
When looking at draft one, I can see that one thing that went well was the idea that when I was filming it was very dark, so a good thing was being able to get something from the video clips that I had filmed in that time. However I will still need to re-film as the lighting needs changing, to enable an improvement in the video as it will allow the video to work better.
Another thing that went well in the first draft was the idea of using ambient sound. This is because there were a few clips where you could not hear anyone in the background over the ambient sound allowing the opening sequence to feel a lot more realistic when it comes to the sound that is being included. Further to this idea the ambient sound makes a big difference to the video due to adding the car engine and dog barking to the videos background without hiding anything that has been happening.
Improvements:
By looking at this draft I can see automatically that a lot needs to be changed to make it work and look a lot better in the way that it has been edited. This is trying to say that the way it has been put together is very basic with editing techniques that are so similar for the flashbacks and none of the clips of the women in bed have any editing techniques used to make them flow better in the extract. The main reason for mentioning this is because I was trying to make sure that I had something to hand in for this deadline. Furthering on this idea it means that I already know that I am going to be needing to change the clips by refilming some of them and adding more and changing the editing of a few parts.
Going on with the idea of what was said in the improvement before, one thing that needs changing is the video clips, as there is not a wide range of shot sizes being used. This means the idea is that I have included a lot of shots which are similar in the way that they have been filmed. An example of this in the opening sequence is when the women is in the bed crying. The shot types for this are either long shots or medium shots, which means that there is not a wide range of these included, lowering down the idea of being able to use the camera. The shots that have not been included very much are close ups, which work better in a thriller as it allows the audience to see specific images and will show the importance of the shot. Furthering on from this, close up shots are needed as well when it comes to the flashbacks of Libby as these clips are a lot more important to the extract.
Another improvement that needs to be added is the sound. The reason for mentioning sound is because of the idea of not including dialogue. By not including dialogue is reduces the idea of interest that maybe seen by the audience, due to the idea that the dialogue will interest the audience with the opening sequence and may make them want to carry on watching the opening sequence.
The next thing that needs improving is the way that the flashbacks are being presented. This is because the video does not link together very well and does not show the change of time and how the younger actress is meant to be the older women in the past. This is an improvement that needs to be included as it will change the whole way that the opening sequence is being portrayed throughout and will help the audience to understand what is actually happening.
When it comes to the first draft I could also do with changing the very beginning of the opening sequence so that the video does not go straight into the women crying in the bedroom. The change of this will allow the start to be a lot less in the face of the audience and will not be as over powering or confusing due to the questions being raised such as; 'Why is she crying?', 'Who is she?', 'How does this relate to the other clips?'. This means that this is changing what people think of the opening sequence and how it can be changed to make it easier for the audience to understand.
Overall:
By adding the improvements from above to the first draft this will allow the opening sequence to look a lot better and will flow a lot more. These improvements will include a dramatic advance in the way the shots have been put together.
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